EWRT1A-62: Grammar Review 3 and appeals

Here is the link to grammar review 3.

And here is my page about appeals, if you'd like it.

transitions

Rules for Writers discusses transitions on pages 64-66. There is a partial list on page 65 and here's my own list. Also, page 29 of our reader has a brief discussion of transitions.

Tough Guise follow up

Here is a more recent video with Jackson Katz. This is at a panel in Australia and he recaps the concept of the "tough guise" and his perception of its negative effect, violence. He also makes it clear that he believes this is learned behavior; that it's not "natural." At the end of this clip, he shows a piece from the full Tough Guise movie which shows how toys, guns, and male bodies have changed in the media over the years. That part starts at 5:06.

EWRT1A62: Reading Response 5

Reading Response 5
Bernard Cooper “A Clack of Tiny Sparks…”
Choose one or come up with your own focus.

• The piece begins and ends with Theresa Sanchez. Why is Theresa so important for Bernard Cooper? What does she represent for him?
• Bernard Cooper was a teenager in the 1960s. Do you think things have changed much for homosexual teenagers in the years since? Please refer to specific parts of Cooper’s memoir in your response.
• Connect the ways Cooper’s true identity is repressed to the ways Jackson Katz says boys’ identities are repressed in the Tough Guise video. Look for similar causes.
• Compare and/or contrast Cooper’s experience with what Anzaldúa or Walker writes about. Look especially at assets. Does Cooper have the kind of help to find his true identity that Anzaldúa or Walker describes? Explain.

EWRT1A62: Tough Guise video

Tough Guise. Please watch the following video for Tuesday. It is a seven minute version of a one hour video. As you watch it, keep certain questions in mind.

• According to Jackson Katz, what are the obstacles young men face to being true to their own identities? Where do these obstacles come from?
• Katz says that concepts of masculinity and violence are connected. Is he convincing in this claim? Do you think that this is culturally reinforced, as Katz argues, or do you think this is a result of nature? Both?
• What are the effects on young men who "take on the tough guise," according to Katz? Do you agree with him?
• How does Katz think young men are going to be able to be "better men"?
• Does Katz offer enough evidence of to support his claims?
• Do your own experiences confirm or deny Katz's claims?

 

EWRT1A62: essay 1 final draft due Tuesday

Remember that both drafts of essay 1, the rough and the final, need to be handed in on Tuesday.

There are a lot of good suggestions for revising essays both in our reader on pages 20-23 and in Rules for Writers on pages 35-40. The most important thing to keep in mind is that you should revise before you edit. In other words, change big things before you worry about sentence-level issues such as grammar and clarity. You don't want to spend your time editing sentences that you later decide to get rid of because they don't fit. Cut, add, and rearrange material first (global revision); then fix grammar, spelling, and clarity (sentence editing, proofreading).

• Global revision
• Review essay purpose: topic & method. Are you answering the prompt?
• Rethink argument. Could your thesis be better?
• Redraft unworkable material.
• Add new material. What further evidence does the paper need?
• Delete material. If it doesn't fit the thesis, then it doesn't belong in the essay.
• Reorganize paragraphs. What is the best order of the paragraphs?
• See other suggestions on pages 36-37 of Rules for Writers and pages 21-22 of our reader.

• Final editing
• Reword sentences for clarity.
• Fix any fragments, run-ons, pronoun agreement, pronoun clarity, subject-verb agreement, and number agreement issues.
• Spell check your spell-checker.
• Have you done the MLA citation properly, both in-text and works cited?
• See the checklist on page 23 of our reader and use Rules for Writers.

           

EWRT1A-62: Grammar Review 2

Here is the pdf for Grammar Review 2. It's due Thursday.